Oh, I do apologize for my long absence! My followers at my old writing site have left numerous notes (there, not here) asking for a new entry. I’m not sure I care to jump back in over there (for a variety of reasons), but my intention of transferring to wordpress has certainly gone the wayside.
I was sidetracked because I was writing web content pages. It’s interesting work, sometimes fun, sometimes challenging, sometimes tedious, but the money I am making gets squirreled away back into savings, my first steps to rebuilding as the Great Repression nears its end.
I finished my second book, but because I am not an editor, there is a bump in my road. The first six chapters are slamming, each page screams to be turned to the next. But the next four chapters go downhill. There’s just not enough excitement, and yet that part is so necessary to the end, which is also interesting and satisfying and open-ended. Somehow I need to meld parts one & two together, but I don’t know how.
I leave you with an old poem (apologies if I’ve posted before):
I see the great regatta, regal and beautiful as it splashes through the waves.
Sail on, oh you in your twenties. You are in your best years and do not know it. Don’t waste it mired in depression. You owe it to the rest not to waste these years while your sails are trimmed and your lines are smooth.
See the proud centurion as she sits upon the water!
And you, so newly crafted, smooth and barnacle-free, it is for you that the others sail on. It is to you that are debt is greatest. We have smoothed the seas as much as possible, but always remember that you ride upon an ocean of tears of both joy and sorrow.
Hi,
It’s good to see an update from you. I’m happy to hear that you’re keeping busy.
Best,
Thanks, Robin. I apologize for the long delay. **HUGS**
I think all those barnacle-free kids are sitting in rowboats drinking beer and playing Angry Birds!
All chapters in a book don’t need to scream with excitement. There can be more leisurely sections. The chart and soul of the piece is characterization. If the reader has a few people to root for, and maybe a few to hiss at, the pace can vary. On the other hand, it’s not generally good to follow several slam-bang chapters with several contemplative ones. If the middle section lacks motion-filled events, condense it–or maybe intersperse those sections as flash-forwards.
Then we have sailed for naught.
It won’t work as flash forward. I think the problem is that I developed one character, then another, rather than developing together.
i know that sometimes when i am reading a good writer’s words, i can get bogged down if things are moving along slow….. if the story is good, i just stick with it to get my prize at the end of the story. i will even slog through the slow parts again if the story is that good.
i like your poem. it fills my head with lovely women’s images.
I’m hoping I won’t make you slog, though. 🙂
Good luck with getting your book pulled together. Maybe taking a step back, letting your mind rest, and then looking at it again after a week or two will allow a new insight to your challenge. (You know me as L/L/L at your old writing site.)
I’m thrilled you’re here! Welcome!
If your problem stems from narrating one character’s story at a time, a solution might be to shuffle the deck, so you follow Character A for a while, then zip back in time to go with Character B, and so on. This could more equably arrange the peaks and valleys. The danger is that, if there are more than three or four main characters, the reader might become confused.
There are four main characters, but I need all four. I think I am going to try the deck shuffle, though. I was thinking last night that I could cut away with “Across town, character B stabbed at the garden weeds with her hoe..” sort of thing, but character A’s story is so compelling, I’m not sure that a cut-away won’t water her down. Thanks for the input, Richard!
Best way to find out is to try it. Actually, cutting away now and then from a more compelling character can help, by occasionally lowering the tension with other characters. Also, the compelling character will keep the reader going with the other stories. BTWL You don’t need the “Scene Cards” (“Across town …”). Begin the chapter with the action: “Bessie stabbed the garden weeds with her hoe …”
Then the reader will wonder who the heck Bessie is, won’t they?
It depends. If you’ve already introduced Bessie, they won’t. If you haven’t, start the chapter, “Bessie Schimmelfarb stabbed the garden weeds with her hoe …” to let the readers know this is a new character.
Oh, the Schimmelfarbs! Well, they never could hoe a straight row, bless their hearts.
No, she hadn’t been introduced. Thanks for the input.
Many years ago, a female prostitute of my acquaintance asked me to take her out on a rowboat in Central Park? “Are you a lesbian?” I asked. “No,” she replied emphatically. Then I knew I could row a straight ho.
YOU have female prostitute acquaintances? Man, you just never know about some people…:)
Yeah, I’m thinking the self-publishing thing would be best. But that’s just me.
Dance baby, dance! 🙂
Self-publishing can be the kiss of death, though. Not sure I’m that adept at self-promotion. Hey, I’m dancing, I’m DANCING! LOL!
Just thought I’d leave you a note in here. I almost forgot this site. It’s interesting to see the advice on introducing a new character. I’m afraid I talk far better than I write!
Hi, Moira! Good to have you here! Yes, Richard is my guru for all writing guidance. Great guy. You write beautifully…but you have a bit of an accent, you know! LOL! TEASING!
Actually I do have an accent. Marrying another Scot we’ve managed to keep our accents. Before my kids went to school they also had a Scottish accent, as my mum lived with us too! Couldn’t get away from all the Scots tongues. It was handy though when they went to Scotland as they understood what was being said, and often translated for their friends.
I know. I was teasing. 🙂 I’ve heard your voice on the videos you’ve posted. Of course, one person’s accent is another’s homeland tongue. 🙂
Good to see you on here again! Hope you find an editor who can help you out. Freelanced.com has some editors you can hire, but I don’t really know much about doing that or how much it would cost or even if you want to go that route.
Tonya
Thanks, Tonya. In order to get an agent to even look at a book, it must be professionally edited, but I’m not really at that stage yet.